The determiner 'The' should be 'This' to refer specifically to the money mentioned in the previous sentence.

The noun 'fund' should be plural 'funds' to indicate that there may be multiple sources or amounts of money for travel.

The determiner 'the' is unnecessary before 'other members' as it is not referring to specific members previously mentioned.

The text '+ example to support idea' appears to be a note to the writer to add an example and should be removed from the final essay.

The comma between 'dynamic' and 'individual' is unnecessary and should be removed.

The term 'miscellaneous fees' is not incorrect, but 'miscellaneous expenses' is more commonly used to refer to various types of costs associated with attending university.

The preposition 'in' is less common in this context. 'At the university' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate attendance at a place of education.

The use of both 'might' and 'probably' is redundant. It is more concise to use only 'might'.

The article 'the' is removed to indicate a general statement about university rather than a specific one.

There is an extra space between 'can' and 'certainly' that should be removed.

The preposition 'when' is incorrect in this context. It should be 'to' to correctly convey the meaning of advantages associated with an action.

The word 'would' is removed to correct the conjunction phrase, making the sentence grammatically correct.

The word 'travelling' can be spelled with one 'l' in American English, but as IELTS follows British English conventions, the spelling with two 'l's is correct.

The phrase 'as well as' is used twice in close proximity, which is repetitive. The second instance should be replaced with 'and' for variety and to avoid redundancy.

The verb 'ask' should be followed by the preposition 'for' when referring to requesting something from someone.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect in this context. 'Travel to' is the correct phrase to indicate movement towards a destination.

The phrase 'is costly' should be 'can be costly' to indicate possibility rather than certainty.

The modal verb 'will' should be in its past form 'would' to maintain consistency with the conditional structure of the sentence.

The word 'essay' should be capitalized as it is the beginning of a sentence.

The preposition 'for' is used to indicate the purpose of an action or object.

IELTS Essay Band 7.5: Year for work or travel