In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.
The essay is well-structured and addresses the question, discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of young people working or traveling for a year before starting university. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples and evidence to support the points made. The writer could also use more transitional phrases to guide the reader through the essay.
You have demonstrated a good understanding of English sentence structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors, particularly with the use of articles and prepositions. These errors do not significantly impede communication, but they do affect the overall quality of your writing. I would suggest that you work on improving your use of articles and prepositions, and try to use a wider range of grammatical structures in your writing.
You have done a good job of organizing your essay and presenting your ideas clearly. Your use of linking words and phrases helps to connect your ideas and paragraphs. However, you could improve your essay by providing more specific examples to support your points and using a wider range of linking words and phrases. Also, make sure to fully develop each point you make. Keep up the good work!
You have done an excellent job in terms of Lexical Resource. Your vocabulary range is wide and you have used it flexibly and accurately. You have also demonstrated your ability to use less common vocabulary. Keep up the good work!