IELTS Essay Band 5.5: Favour, letter to a friend
A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday.
Write a letter to your friend. In your letter:
– give contact details for when you are away – give instructions about how to care for your pet – describe other household duties
Bandscore
Band: 6
Band: 4
Band: 6
Band: 6
Task Achievement
You have done a good job of addressing all the points in the question and maintaining a consistent and appropriate tone. However, you could improve your Task Achievement by providing more detailed and specific information, and by using more varied and complex language. For example, instead of saying 'Please make sure to feed one can at a time', you could specify the size of the can and the times of day the pet should be fed.
- Provide more specific instructions about how to care for the pet, such as the size of the can of food and the times of day the pet should be fed.
- Describe the other household duties in more detail, such as how often to water the plants and where to put the trash.
- Use more varied and complex language to make your writing more engaging and effective.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
You have made a good attempt at writing a letter, but there are several areas where you could improve. Your sentence structures are somewhat limited and repetitive, and you often make grammatical errors. These errors do not significantly impede communication, but they do make your writing less clear and precise. I would suggest that you practice using a wider variety of sentence structures, and pay more attention to your use of articles, prepositions, and punctuation. Keep up the good work, and with a bit more practice, I'm sure you will improve.
- Use a wider variety of sentence structures.
- Review the rules for using articles and prepositions.
- Practice using complex sentences correctly.
- Pay more attention to punctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have done a good job of organizing your ideas and providing clear instructions. However, you could improve the coherence and cohesion of your essay by using more varied and sophisticated linking words and phrases, managing your paragraphing better, and improving your transitions between ideas. Keep practicing and you will continue to improve.
- Use more varied and sophisticated linking words and phrases.
- Manage paragraphing better to enhance coherence and cohesion.
- Improve transitions between ideas.
Lexical Resource
You have done a good job of using a range of vocabulary to express your thoughts in this essay. However, there are a few areas where you could improve. Ensure consistency in naming - if the pet's name is 'Cherry', it should not be referred to as 'Button' later in the essay. Also, proofread your work to catch and correct typos. Finally, try to use more precise language when giving instructions. Keep up the good work!
- Ensure consistency in naming. If the pet's name is 'Cherry', it should not be referred to as 'Button' later in the essay.
- Proofread the essay to catch and correct typos like 'meat' instead of 'me at'.
- Use more precise language when giving instructions. For example, instead of saying 'keep the trash bag at the front door', say 'place the trash bag outside the front door'.