IELTS Essay Band 7: Party invitation letter to a neighbour

Question
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You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour.

Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter:

– introduce yourself – describe your plans for the party – invite your neighbour to come

Your submission
Dear Kathy,
, your new next-door neighbor in apartment 09, Block A. I have just moved in
. First of all, I'm writing to say hi and tell you a little about myself. I am 22 years old. Currently, I’m working as an advertising executive for an advertising agency
. Next month, I’m going to throw a housewarming party to celebrate my move. Some friends and colleagues of mine will be coming and I’m planning to cook for the guests. Also, I will prepare some board games for all the participants to play together.
, I would like to say sorry in advance if there is any noise from my apartment at that time. In fact, it would be great if you
come to the party too! I really think we would have a great time with each other, since we live in the same building.
Let me know if you can come.
, Roy
Your band
7
Overall band

Bandscore

CATEGORY
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2
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6
7
8
9
Task Achievement


Band: 7

Grammatical Range & Accuracy


Band: 8

Coherence & Cohesion


Band: 7

Lexical Resource


Band: 6

Band breakdown
7

Task Achievement

The essay is well-written and addresses all the points required in the task. The writer introduces themselves, describes their plans for the party, and invites the neighbor. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details about the party and the writer's lifestyle. Also, the flow of ideas could be more structured.

Band breakdown & tips
  • Provide more specific details about the party such as the date, time, and expected duration.
  • Provide more details about the writer's lifestyle to make the letter more personal and engaging.
  • Improve the flow of ideas by first introducing themselves, then talking about the party, apologizing for the potential noise, and finally inviting the neighbor.
8

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

You have done an excellent job in terms of grammatical range and accuracy. Your sentences are well-structured and error-free, and you have used a variety of sentence types. However, you could further improve by using more varied sentence structures and more complex vocabulary. Keep up the good work!

Band breakdown & tips
  • Try to use more varied sentence structures, such as conditional sentences or sentences with relative clauses.
  • Use more complex vocabulary to express your ideas.
  • Try to use more varied punctuation, such as semicolons or dashes.
7

Coherence and Cohesion

You have done a good job of organizing your thoughts and presenting them in a clear and logical manner. Your use of transitional phrases and cohesive devices helps to guide the reader through your thoughts. However, you could enhance the flow of your essay by using more varied linking words and cohesive devices. Also, consider adding a more personal touch or expressing hope for a positive response in your conclusion. Finally, try to use more varied sentence structures to enhance the flow and readability of your essay.

Band breakdown & tips
  • Use more varied linking words and cohesive devices to enhance the flow of the essay.
  • Add a more personal touch or express hope for a positive response in the conclusion.
  • Use more varied sentence structures to enhance the flow and readability of the essay.
6

Lexical Resource

You have done a good job in using a range of vocabulary to express your thoughts. Your word choice is precise and you have used vocabulary flexibly. However, to improve your Lexical Resource score, you could use more complex and less common words. This will show a higher level of English knowledge. Keep practicing and expanding your vocabulary.

Band breakdown & tips
  • To improve the Lexical Resource, you could use more complex and less common words. For example, instead of 'throw a housewarming party', you could say 'host a housewarming soiree'.
  • Instead of 'I’m working as an advertising executive', you could say 'I’m employed as an advertising executive'.
  • Instead of 'I would like to say sorry in advance', you could say 'I would like to extend my apologies in advance'.
  • Instead of 'How do you think?', you could say 'What are your thoughts on this?'
Word count
161
250
161
Recommended word count: 250+
Paragraph count
4
3
4
4
Recommended paragraph count: 3-4
Grammar errors
Writing Precision
The answer is related to the question and addresses all the points required in the task. However, the precision and focus can be improved by providing more specific details about the party such as the date, time, and expected duration of the party.
Grammatical structures
The essay uses a variety of structures including simple sentences, compound sentences, and complex sentences. The range of structures is wide, including declarative sentences, interrogative sentences, and imperative sentences.
Relationships between ideas
The relationships between ideas are displayed well in the essay. The writer uses cohesive devices like 'Also,' and 'In fact,' to connect their thoughts. However, more varied cohesive devices could be used to enhance the flow.