IELTS Essay Band 7: Party invitation letter to a neighbour

Question
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You have just moved into a new home and are planning to hold a party. You are worried that the noise may disturb your neighbour.

Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter:

  • introduce yourself
  • describe your plans for the party
  • invite your neighbour to come
Your submission
Dear Kathy, I’m Trinh, your new next-door neighbor in apartment 09, Block A.
First of all, I'm writing to say hi and tell you a little about myself. I am 22 years old. Currently, I’m working as an advertising executive for an advertising agency in district 1. Next month, I’m going to throw a housewarming party to celebrate my move. Some friends and colleagues of mine will be coming and I’m planning to cook for the guests. Also, I will prepare some board games for all the participants to play together. Therefore, I would like to say sorry in advance if there is any noise from my apartment at that time. In fact, it would be great if you
come to the party too! I really think we would have a great time with each other, since we live in the same building.
Warm
Roy
Your band
7
Overall band

Bandscore

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Task Achievement


Band: 7

Grammar


Band: 8

Coherence & Cohesion


Band: 7

Lexical Resource


Band: 6

Band breakdown
7

Task Achievement

You have done a good job in addressing the task requirements. Your letter is clear, focused, and appropriately informal. However, you could provide more details about the party and express more concern about the potential noise disturbance. Also, stating the purpose of the letter at the beginning could make your intention clearer.

Band breakdown & tips
  • State the purpose of the letter at the beginning.
  • Provide more details about the party, such as the date and time.
  • Express more concern about the potential noise disturbance.
8

Grammar

You have done an excellent job with your grammatical range and accuracy in this essay. Your sentences are well structured, and you have effectively used a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences. Your punctuation is also well managed, and there are no significant grammatical errors. Keep up the good work!

7

Coherence and Cohesion

You have done a good job of organizing your ideas and linking them together in a logical manner. Your use of cohesive devices, such as sequencing and addition, helps guide the reader through your text. However, you could consider using a wider variety of these devices to enhance the flow of your essay. Also, try to avoid repetition of certain phrases to improve the coherence and cohesion of your essay.

Band breakdown & tips
  • Consider using a wider variety of cohesive devices to enhance the flow of the essay.
  • Try to avoid repetition of certain phrases to improve the coherence and cohesion of the essay.
6

Lexical Resource

You have done a good job in using a range of vocabulary to express your thoughts and plans. Your word choice is precise and appropriate for the context. However, to improve your Lexical Resource score, you could try to use more complex vocabulary and include some idiomatic expressions. This would make your writing more natural and fluent. Keep up the good work!

Band breakdown & tips
  • Try to use more complex vocabulary to express your thoughts.
  • Include some idiomatic expressions to make your writing more natural and fluent.
  • Try to use a wider range of vocabulary related to the topic.
Your strong phrases
I’m working as an advertising executive for an advertising agency in district 1.
I’m going to throw a housewarming party to celebrate my move.
I really think we would have a great time with each other, since we live in the same building.
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