There is no 'Japan Ministry of History'. The correct government body responsible for energy policy in Japan is the 'Ministry of Economy, Trade and Industry'.

Removing the unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'radiation' as it is being used in a general sense, not referring to a specific instance.

The term 'future wars' is redundant in this context. The correct phrase should be 'prevent wars'.

Eliminating the unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'nuclear' to make the noun usage more general rather than specific.

Japan did not have nuclear power plants during World War II. The first commercial nuclear power plant in Japan began operation in the 1960s.

The first mention of a country should use its full name, 'the United States', instead of the abbreviation 'the USA'.

The text incorrectly refers to 'Fusion reactors' which are not yet in commercial operation. The correct term should be 'Nuclear reactors' as they are the ones currently used for energy production.

The term 'Empire of Japan' is historically used for Japan before the end of World War II. The correct term in the modern context should simply be 'Japan'.

The word 'beneefited' is misspelled; the correct spelling is 'benefited'.

Since the term 'Empire of Japan' has been corrected to 'Japan', the subsequent reference should be 'it' instead of 'the empire'.

Removing the unnecessary comma after 'prevented' to improve sentence flow and punctuation accuracy.

Changing the verb form to 'used' to match the tense and provide a more concise and clear statement.

Correcting the preposition to 'at' to indicate a specific point or location, which is more appropriate in this context than 'in'.

Changing the preposition to 'within' to convey a sense of being enclosed or surrounded, which is more accurate for the context.

IELTS Essay Band 7: Nuclear Threats and Benefits