IELTS Essay Band 7: Nuclear Threats and Benefits

Question
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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy.

The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your submission
Nuclear technology has had a significant effect on everyone. Although there are a myriad of advantages this technology offers, the dangers it poses are significant. This essay will examine its pros and cons and explain why I think that it is beneficial to all of us, despite the risks.
from nuclear technology is hazardous to humans and the environment. More than 30 years ago, several people perished when the nuclear reactor
Chernobyl leaked. It exposed several people to a high level of radiation, which was enough to kill some people within a few days, and many developed cancer
a few months. Furthermore, the whole city of Chernobyl has been deemed uninhabitable for the next 100 thousand years after the unfortunate event. However, such a problem could have been
had people been more careful to avoid potential dangers. In fact, many investigations later revealed that the cause of the nuclear fallout was human error. On the other hand, many countries have
from nuclear technology.
can produce enough energy to power an entire nation. The
, for instance, has
nuclear power plants
. According to the
,
power plants,
would not have become an economic powerhouse today. In addition, the world superpowers have paradoxically maintained peace among nations by arming themselves with nuclear bombs. This is because the nuclear arsenal has served as a deterrent to war. Some experts claim that the possession of nuclear weapons by
has resulted in these two countries being recognized by many nations as the "police officers of the world". Therefore, the USA and Russia could intervene between disputing countries and thus,
. To sum up, while there are possible yet preventable hazards, nuclear technology has several advantages, particularly in energy generation and world peace. I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks, and I suggest that all governments use nuclear technology to its full potential.
Your band
7
Overall band

Bandscore

CATEGORY
1
2
3
4
5
6
7
8
9
Task Achievement


Band: 6

Grammatical Range & Accuracy


Band: 7

Coherence & Cohesion


Band: 7

Lexical Resource


Band: 7

Band breakdown
6

Task Achievement

The essay provides a balanced view on the benefits and disadvantages of nuclear technology, which is commendable. However, the essay could benefit from more specific examples and evidence to support the claims. The ideas presented could also be further developed, and the connections between the points could be made clearer. Overall, the essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic, but there is room for improvement in terms of depth and clarity.

Band breakdown & tips
  • Provide more specific examples and evidence to support the claims.
  • Explore more about the potential of nuclear technology in other fields.
  • Discuss more about the potential solutions to the hazards posed by nuclear technology.
  • Provide more clear connections between the points.
  • Explain more about how the benefits of nuclear technology outweigh its disadvantages.
7

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

You have demonstrated a good understanding of grammatical range and accuracy in your essay. Your use of a variety of sentence structures, including complex sentences, is commendable. However, there were a few grammatical errors, including a spelling mistake and a missing article. These errors did not significantly impede the readability or meaning of your essay, but they should be addressed in future essays. I suggest that you proofread your essays carefully to catch and correct these errors.

Band breakdown & tips
  • Use a wider variety of sentence structures to demonstrate your grammatical range.
  • Proofread your essay to catch and correct spelling errors.
  • Ensure that you use articles correctly in your sentences.
7

Coherence and Cohesion

You have written a well-structured essay with a clear argument and good use of evidence. Your ideas are organized logically and your paragraphing is well managed. However, there is room for improvement in your topic sentences and in the clarity of your conclusion. Keep practicing and refining your writing skills.

Band breakdown & tips
  • The introduction could be improved by providing a brief overview of the points that will be discussed in the essay.
  • The body paragraphs could be improved by having a clearer topic sentence at the start of each one.
  • The conclusion could be improved by summarizing the main points of the essay more clearly.
7

Lexical Resource

You have demonstrated a strong command of vocabulary in your essay. Your word choice is precise and you have used a wide range of vocabulary to express your ideas. However, there was one spelling error and one inappropriate word choice. Please pay attention to these details in your future writing. Overall, your lexical resource is impressive.

Band breakdown & tips
  • Replace 'Empire of Japan' with 'Japan'.
  • Correct the spelling of 'beneefited' to 'benefited'.
  • Try to use more complex and less common words to further enhance your vocabulary range.
Word count
335
250
335
Recommended word count: 250+
Paragraph count
5
3
5
4
Recommended paragraph count: 3-4
Grammar errors
Writing Precision
The answer is related to the question and addresses both the benefits and disadvantages of nuclear technology. However, the focus could be improved by providing more specific examples and evidence to support the claims. For instance, the essay could delve deeper into how nuclear technology contributes to world peace and provide more concrete examples of its use in energy generation.
Grammatical structures
The essay uses a variety of sentence structures, including simple, compound, and complex sentences. The range of structures is wide, demonstrating the writer's ability to use different sentence forms effectively.
Relationships between ideas
The relationships between ideas are displayed well in the essay. The author clearly shows how the benefits and drawbacks of nuclear technology are related to each other.